This Haiku journey is fantastic! The excitement of learning a new craft and discovering more and more – and thanks to a wonderful response from Maia to my last post, I am now trying to form the Haiku according to this part of her comment:
“I’ve found that working with another rule has drastically improved my haiku. Traditionally, the first and second lines are supposed to form a complete concept/idea/image/emotion, and the second and third, another. What makes the poem is how they work together. I think I got a piece of that idea in this one:
In the mid-day rain
Three goldfinches bicker
Over damp thistle”
Isn’t that beautiful!
The excitement I feel is the same thrill I get working out a new knitting or crochet pattern, or craft experiment – I feel fireworks of joy going off in my brain, in my synapses, in my toes, fingers and just everywhere! I just had to look ‘synapses’ up to see if I got that right and in the definition was this description:
“When all your synapses are firing, you’re focused and your mind feels electric.”
YES! EXACTLY!
Anyway – here goes
sunrise meets the oak branches in a soft pink glow frame for a chaffinch
nearly there? Thank you Maia!
Ravelry
I never mind creative energy disturbing my sleep and I know that it can’t be resisted but must be attended to. Yes, I did sleep well afterwards and have more Haiku running through my head. Thank you for introducing me to this lovely way with words!! Melissa Xx
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What do you think it means that I have just awoke at half past one a.m. and a Haiku runs through my head? Something about your post unwittingly stuck and I could not get back to sleep until I rechecked the syllable criteria! Feeling rather silly. And excitedly creative, I think you understand.
While in the garden
His feet became quite sodden
From the sideways rain
Is that correct? Back to bed for me. Goodnight.
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WoW! Yes I TOTALLY understand and it makes me smile SO MUCH!!! Also feeling slightly bothered that anything I have done disturbed your sleep, because with 5 young children, sleep must be the most precious thing to you! You seem to have completely nailed it as far as I understand from Maia’s wonderful tutorial – getting the two phrases to work together and in their own right – FABULOUS!!!! hope you got some good sleep afterwards ❤ Thank you SO much for sharing your lovely Haiku!!!!!!!!!!!!! xxxxxxx
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